Kiefer Sutherland is 56 years old, he is a Canadian actor, producer and director. Kiefer Sutherland Participant in the series 24, I know him from there and he's an excellent actor. He's the son of a Canadian actor, Donald Sutherland. Kiefer Sutherland is a very creative person, I learned a lot from him and I will learn more. When he was young his parents said "he would be a actor" and it's true.

Kiefer Sutherland was born in 1966 in Canada(My bad). He has black hair, brown eyes and he likes to go shopping. He gets angry easily, he's always happy.  His parents, Donald Sutherland and Shirley Sutherland, are successful Canadian actors. When he was young his parents knew he had to be a star. When he was young, his family moved to Corona, California, he loved the place and he didn't want to leave. Then, his parents divorced and he moved with his mother to Toronto. Since he was young he was advertised, he loved the T.V, that's why he became famous.

Kiefer Sutherland started to do films. The first film that he has made "Stand by Me", he played the neighbourhood bully. As of 2008, he started to do more films. He was very talented and creative. He has starred in Japanese commercials for Calorie Mate, performing a parody of his Jack Bauer(24) character. Kiefer Sutherland began to appear in ad campaigns and everyone loved him.

In conclusion, Kiefer Sutherland is talented, creative, and a great actor,in my opinion, Kiefer talented than anyone else.Kiefer is strong man, he knows how to play in movies and in series, Kiefer is a big star ever.

A movie review-Zombieland

Zombieland is a(ww. - an) action comedy movie. I watched the movie in my house with my friends. Zombieland is about 4 people,  together they try to find refuge against zombies. but the film's writers included  special things in the film, creating a different and better movie.

The movie takes place in Hollywood, California. the Main characters in this film are Columbus(Jesse Eisenberg), Wichita (Emma Stone), Little Rock(Abigail Breslin) and Tallahassee(Woody Harrelson).Columbus goes to see if his parents are still alive in Ohio, he start(gr.) the car and suddenly he discovers the engine (is) destroyed. (new sentence) then he seen(gr.) his friend Tallahasse(Woody Harrelson). They travel together and when they stop at a grocery store, they meet two sisters,  Wichita (Emma Stone) and Little Rock(Abigail Breslin). They seen(gr.) a truck with lots of weapons, but when the boys meet the girls again, the girls attempt once more to steal their truck.

Eventually, they driven(gr.) to Los Angeles"Pacific Playland" amusement park, rumored to be zombie-free. Columbus  like(gr.) the idea and wants to leave them, (New sentence) he decides to stay with the group, he has no where to go. Wichita and Little Rock goes(gr.) alone to the park beacuse Wichita begun(gr.) to develop feelings for Columbus. When the girls arrive at the park, they  (don't) see any zombies, so they turn on lights and zombies come. The sisters begun(gr.) to shout and then the boys heard(gr.) them, (New sentence) the boys wanted(gr.) to save the girls, Columbus Junction attracts the heart of the zombies Columbus then the girls ran away with Tallahassee. Columbus managed(gr.) to escape from the zombies and they all go to a safe place.
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In my opinion "Zombieland" is a great movie, I highly recommend to see this movie. This movie has lots of action, the actors playing(gr.) well, this movie shows everything about friends, shows us how to behave to friends. Anyone who sees this movie will enjoy,(New sentence) if I enjoyed this movie everyone can, it doesn't matter if you love comedy, you will love this movie.

This is better, but your main problems remains - grammar . I don't understand why you keep using the V3 form where it is not needed.
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Daphna

 

 

The most important invention of all times

Many important inventions were invented in the 20th century, cars, computers and more.
Today, all the Inventions are so important beacuse we use them everyday. These inventions changed our lives and made it(gr. - them) easier. Some people think that these inventions destroying(gr.) the world

I think the cellphone (is) the most important thing in everyday(life) beacuse(sp.) it saves(ww. - prevents) worry and problems. Anyone who has a cellphone take(gr.) it with him to(מיותר) everywhere. The cellphone makes the life easier and your perents(sp.) didn't(gr.) need to worry about you when you go out or when you are late. For example, when I go to the movies with my friends my pareave to worry(what?), I can talk to them all the time.

I asked my perents and my grandperents which (was the) most important invention for them. My mother said that the most important invention is the cellphone, beacuse she's all the time on the cellphone/phone(wo.), and she's(מיותר) likes the cellphone, she also works in a job that requires (a) cell phone. My father said that the most important invention is the car, he's(מיותר) likes the car and always loved to drive his car, (he) hates bus(es)  and taxi(s). He could(gr. - can) go anywhere he wants.

My grandperents said that the T.V is the most important invention beacuse they likes(gr.) to heard(gr.) and to seen(gr.+ww. - watch) news. In addition, it updates them(מיותר) (on) all events in the world and They updated everything(phr.). They can't (do) without the T.V, It takes the boring.(phr.)

I think there are differentces between the opinions about the most important inventions is the most (מיותר) beacuse (of) the difference in age(מיותר) ages. My grandperents think that the T.V is so important because they  barely use the cellphones. Currently, these inventions do not matter to them, they do not need it so they need only the T.V.

My name is Bar Sharvit, I'm 14 years old, and I'm(מיותר) study in Kugel, High School. My hair is brown and my eyes is(gr. - are) green. I have 2 sisters.We are 5 people in my family

My hobbies are to play on the computer and to play football and sometimes basketball. I love so much football beacuse I think it's good to practice and to stay fit. In school, sometimes, my friends and I play football. When we play football we need to move all the time, we can't stop.

In my spare time or during holidays I like to go out with my friends, to watch a movie, go to(מיותר) bowling and sometimes just to a garden(phr.). In school I like to meet my friends and to learn new things. I don't like in the school the homework, sometimes you don't want to do your homework but you need to do that. The teachers in my school are good, they know how to teach. My favorite subjects in school is(gr. - are) English, Arabic and Sport, I love to learn languages, I think all the people need to learn that.

My expectations from this year are to succeed in school and be a good student, this year we need to learn well for the Matriculation exams. We have been big(phr.+gr. - we are older and more mature now) and need to think about the future.I hope to succeed this year.

This better. Good work.
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Daphna

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